RENGA: IN COLLABORATION WITH CLAUDIA MCGILL

RENGA: IN COLLABORATION WITH CLAUDIA MCGILL

 

 

Claudia responded to my sonnet, MARRIAGE AND DIVOURCE, in a group haiku, called Joints and Angles. I add a couplet of seven syllables to each of the six to form a RENGA.

 

1.

 Creaking and flexing

 the structure sways in the wind

 returns to center.

noises due to loosen joints

fix to reduce wind friction

 

2.

 The door flies open

 hinges bent back by the wind

 A new gust shuts it.

wind roar loud through weakened gaps

blow whistles to face music

 

3.

 The stiff joint catches

 protesting against movement

 crying out for oil.

lubricate to flex and walk

frozen joints: swollen and stiff

 

4.

 An easy quick gait

 owes thanks to flexible joints

 fit for rough terrain

stretching and strengthening joints

resist slippery slope fall

 

5.

 Eager hearts set out

 covering the rough terrain

 at a steady pace

determined to walk the path

pacemaker beats set hearts rhythm

 

6.

 Bowing to the wind

 unfolding to new angles

 Healing the mistakes

listen to feeling unfold

love learns life’s imperfection

 

 

15 thoughts on “RENGA: IN COLLABORATION WITH CLAUDIA MCGILL

      1. Claudia McGill

        If it is your first renga, I think you have the touch for it, I would have thought you have done this many times. I think it is hard to complete or add to another’s thoughts, in words or conversation, in a harmonious matter and sensitive to the original beginning. I hope to try this myself, renga, I have not done it either, and you have inspired me.

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